SHORT EVALUATION FOR OUR ROUGH CUT

             

This is the end product of our rough cut which I put together some of the clips that we shot during the day.
We showed this to some of our peers and most of the comments were positive. However we also got some feedbacks from our media teacher; these were the feedbacks:

The creation of the toy takes too long - there's a lot of tying. Could the glitch effect be used again.

Create a diegetic sound-scape - the steps of the boy, the heavy breath, the scraping of the chalk, laughing of the boy when he plays -  will add much more atmosphere.

It is not obvious to the viewer that the boy is creating an imaginary friend - could you have whispers at the point when the boy looks at the camera suggesting the presence of someone else?Or make more of the drawing - close on as he sketches out the drawing - then go to the drone shot.

Then a close up on the boy looking at the sketch or holding hands with the sketch?

In my opinion, I fully agree with all of the point that Mr Harrison has suggested. And we am planning to cover all of these improvements for our final product. 

Other feedbacks:
- unable to work out the meaning of the film.
- colour grading
- shaky footage
- music is too epic